Thursday 13 February 2014

Communications (Trifextra)

This week's Trifextra challenge asks for 33 words exactly about love gone wrong, with the added challenge of requesting that the following words are not included:

love - sad - tears - wept - heart - pain

This is my offering:-

Communications

Bodies curled together, shared heat, now separated by blank indifference.  Nothing fills the breach.  Communication lost; irretrievable.  Clare forgets when, precisely.  It doesn’t matter now, though she would have tried if he’d asked.

(33 words)


9 comments:

  1. Oh, ouch. I have been there, Clare! Nicely set up and I love the last reflection, where it's still always gonna be his fault!

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  2. When communication breaks down.. it's often to late to ask.

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  3. Thanks - it took a little thought in light of word restrictions to convey what I was going for!

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  4. Blank indifference...nothing fills the breach. Oomph. Powerful. I felt those lines for sure. Great work!

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  5. Oh. That last line is a kicker. Nicely done. Thanks for linking up.

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